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Cloud Shapes in Blue Skies – Itialian Sonnet

Italian Sonnet
Night’s shelter brings relief to end the day,
exhaling whispers grieve from parched dry lips.
As if cold wind abandoned sailing ships;
marooned –  in deep lost waters, here I lay.
Conflicting thoughts merge, lacking words to say, 
my willing heart drawn into your eclipse –
has left me drained. A warm tear gently slips
down a familiar path, wet lines portray.
I long for truth behind your phantom eyes;
release your secret world, allow me in.
I hunger laughter shared on sunny days –
remember finding cloud shapes in blue skies?
I miss your music dancing on my skin,
provoking trust – Oh friend, won’t you please stay?
☮TheMsLvh © 2011
sumitted to dVerse poets
Image borrowed from Google
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  1. August 14, 2011 at 2:20 pm

    sweet poem, great image, always nice to read formalist verse…bravo! RT

    • August 14, 2011 at 2:26 pm

      Thank you, I am trying all different forms, trying to stay true to them. Thank you for taking the time to comment.

  2. August 14, 2011 at 2:54 pm

    Hello again.
    I’m in the land of the unknown when it comes to all the different poetry forms, but I really like this poem of yours. Although sad, it’s visually stunning.
    My favorite lines: “I long for truth behind your phantom eyes;
    release your secret world, allow me in.”

    Awesome poetry & visuals!

    Thanks for giving me the link.
    Come back and visit me anytime. ;-).

    Have a lovely week ahead!

    • August 14, 2011 at 3:13 pm

      Andy, Forms are a way of educating myself in poetry, while still expressing what it is I want to write. I so much enjoyed the link you left behind, I thought I would return the favor. Have a great week yourself

  3. August 14, 2011 at 5:22 pm

    Very lovely lilt to this and you have adhered to the form admirably. Great rhythm and flow to it. I am also amazed at the cloud horse – is it for real or photoshopped, I wonder?

  4. August 14, 2011 at 7:42 pm

    love it, extraordinary composition,

    Greeting,

    It has been a fantastic experience with you being part of Jingle Poetry Community,

    Your poetry is sunshine to us,

    Hope all is well.
    Bless you,
    with my best regards and gratitude.
    Morning!
    xoxox

    • August 14, 2011 at 7:48 pm

      I have enjoyed Jingle. Good luck on the new site!

  5. August 14, 2011 at 8:29 pm

    wow, you did it! love it. good one.

    • August 14, 2011 at 8:53 pm

      Your comments are well received! Marian, you enjoy formal formed poetry?

  6. August 15, 2011 at 12:47 am

    “I long for truth behind your phantom eyes;”
    ….simply brilliant…

    • August 15, 2011 at 6:41 am

      Thank you Eclipse. Love your poem about the tree btw.

  7. August 15, 2011 at 1:33 am

    A beautiful sonnet, loving and tranquil. The photo is fabulous: who’d have thought a horse could gallop out of a cloud. Pegasus, perhaps.

    • August 15, 2011 at 6:45 am

      Thanks Viv. I did like that image when I saw it. Reminded me; a friend and I saw a herd of giraffes in the clouds. Perhaps we were 10 or 11 yrs. old.

  8. August 15, 2011 at 3:10 am

    Awesome sonnet and visuals are excellent. A sad tone to your poem and beautifully written :)

    • August 15, 2011 at 6:46 am

      Thank you Norma for your thoughtful comments.

  9. August 15, 2011 at 3:43 am

    Very nice and filled with longing.
    Thank you for visiting my blog and commenting. For some reason I was unable to reply to your comment.

    I posted a poem about cloud watching a few weeks back. Here’s a link if you’d like to read it: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/07/28/an-empty-sky/

  10. August 15, 2011 at 3:57 am

    I do like your formal formed poetry, and you have chosen some wonderful words:

    “my willing heart drawn into your eclipse” and more!

    • August 15, 2011 at 6:48 am

      Thank you Mary for appreicating a sonnet. This one being Italian.

  11. Leona
    August 15, 2011 at 5:37 am

    What a beautiful poem. I wish your days to be sunny again and may that sweet music fill your soul once more. The picture fits the poem perfectly. You did it again my friend. You know me, i don’t know anything about poetry, but whatever you are doing, i like it! It really seems to be your avenue of expression and release. I hope you find peace within.

    Love you girl!

  12. August 15, 2011 at 6:58 am

    Nice use of the sonnet form– my fave!

    • August 15, 2011 at 7:20 am

      So happy you enjoyed this. I like sonnets too.

  13. August 15, 2011 at 7:06 am

    This is a wonderful sonnet – such a mood of wistful longing, and wonder at the inspiration nature offers the observing eye.
    I loved the lines:

    I hunger laughter shared on sunny days –
    on our backs; finding cloud shapes in blue skies.
    I miss your music dancing on my skin…

    Thank you for sharing your piece with us at Real Toads.

    • August 15, 2011 at 7:19 am

      Thank you Kerry, I stumbled upon your blog and found it interesting and informative. I’ll be back!

  14. August 15, 2011 at 12:07 pm

    I admire your courage in trying an Italian sonnet. Nicely done, pure in style.

    Did you find it more of a challenge than the Shakespearian? For some reason, the Italian sonnets boggle my mind. The rhyming pattern frustrates me. Still, the only way we grow is by trying. That’s why you are leaving me in the dust.

    • August 15, 2011 at 12:44 pm

      Mike, as you know poetry has a rythum such as a drum. I am discovering the different beats associated with each form. I would like to think we are in this “dust” together. You bring clarity when I get dust in my eyes. One foot infront of the other partner! You are my other foot when it comes to writing poetry, for it was your first footstep that opened this world for me.

  15. August 15, 2011 at 12:12 pm

    “my willing heart drawn into your eclipse –
    has left me drained.”

    Loved the whole piece but that has a real charge. I enjoy your writing! :-)

    • August 15, 2011 at 12:45 pm

      So glad you found that line appealing. Thank you for your visit and time for posting. Really appreicate your comments.

  16. August 15, 2011 at 7:59 pm

    Simply beautiful (again!). I never cease to find such enjoyment and pleasure reading your poetry. Such vivid settings in well formed verse. Keep experimenting. A lot to learn from your work :-)

    “I long for truth behind your phantom eyes;
    release your secret world, allow me in.”

    This line resonates so much with me. That curiosity rising, looking for what is hidden, and guarded by the mysterious, just beyond the threshold of one’s reach. Love it! Great job

    • August 15, 2011 at 8:07 pm

      Pervagus
      I enjoy your comments immensely. I like the fact you enjoy a well formed verse. Thank you.

  17. August 15, 2011 at 9:55 pm

    First time on your site, and am I glad I stopped! You are a true romantic – and I’m sure much more; I will peruse your site a bit.

    I read all poems aloud, and this one rolled off my tongue like caramel. Such careful choices of words, beautifully expressed. My favorite line is:
    “I miss your music dancing on my skin.” That made me tingle a bit. Lovely write.
    Amy Barlow Liberatore, with some grounded poetry back atcha:
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/08/15/forward-march-special-ops/

    • August 16, 2011 at 6:34 am

      Amy. Thank you for visiting. I loved your comment. I have read your poem yesterday and it was impressed with it. Great poem

  18. August 16, 2011 at 12:11 am

    I miss your music dancing on my skin,
    provoked my spirit – Oh, I wish you’d stay……………………

    beautiful lines….loved it :)

    • August 16, 2011 at 6:41 am

      Thank you and so pleased you enjoyed it.

    • August 16, 2011 at 7:24 am

      Thanks for all your comments!

  19. August 16, 2011 at 7:20 am

    Thank you David. And thanks for visiting and taking the time to comment.

  20. August 16, 2011 at 12:59 pm

    Strange, this thing we do…turning heartache into tangible beauty…touching others who have been there….all in it for a penny or a pound. The only way. Those who feel deeply will always resonate as kindred spirits.

    And you’re as cute as the nose on a kitten.

  21. August 16, 2011 at 1:40 pm

    your music dancing on my skin…oh i feel the longing in this…beautiful pain in the loss…

    • August 16, 2011 at 1:57 pm

      Brian, beautiful pain in the loss. Wow. Powerful comment Thank you for your time and visit.

      • August 16, 2011 at 5:34 pm

        did not realise you were a newbie at our pub…glad you joined us…if you need anything let us know..

      • August 16, 2011 at 5:49 pm

        Thanks Brian, I am throughly impressed with what I have been reading for the past couple of hours at dVerse. Some of your poets I already subscribe to and have found some really amazing new writers. Thank you again Brian.

  22. August 16, 2011 at 1:41 pm

    What a pleasure to read.
    After the day i have had you have wrapped mre in a blanket and soothed some ills.
    Thankyou very much – the power of words in effect ;~)

    • August 16, 2011 at 1:55 pm

      I long for a man that can find solace in poetry. Thank you Aaron for your kind comment

  23. August 16, 2011 at 2:13 pm

    lovely, sad and full of longing..the music dancing on skin…beautiful pic to go with your words as well

    • August 16, 2011 at 2:58 pm

      Claudia,
      It seems many enjoy that line, I am assuming many can relate. Thank you for your visit.

  24. hedgewitch
    August 16, 2011 at 2:46 pm

    An easy flowing sonnet which deals with hard things softly, and with that lingering on the mind cadence only a sonnet can give–i can’t write them worth a hill of beans, but I love reading them, and this one is lovely. Enjoyed it much.

    • August 16, 2011 at 2:56 pm

      Thank you for your comment about sonnets. I am particularly finding them worth the time and effort. Glad you enjoyed my little poem site.

  25. Gay
    August 16, 2011 at 3:15 pm

    Lovely sonnet! I think this form the summit of English forms and quite the most difficult. You have achieved a real beauty here that binds a dreamlike experience to a love song. What could be more Shakespearean than that! I enjoyed this very much.

    • August 16, 2011 at 3:27 pm

      Thank you Gay very much for your lovely comment. I enjoy poets that can truly appreicate a sonnet.

  26. August 16, 2011 at 4:27 pm

    Beautiful form.. and I do love the way your words flows fluidly from one line to another.

    Nice to meet you at D’Verse ~

    • August 16, 2011 at 4:48 pm

      Heaven, Thank you for your comment and noticing my writing. I am thrilled I found dVerse Poet site.

  27. August 16, 2011 at 4:37 pm

    I admire your dedication to form and experimenting with variety, Lisa. Takes conviction and patience. With this one you stay true to form and impart a coherent message. Not easily accomplished. Nice write.

    • August 16, 2011 at 4:47 pm

      Kim! So thrilled you enjoyed it. Thank you for your time and visiting. I Love your book!

  28. August 16, 2011 at 4:37 pm

    Your music dancing on my skin — how great imagery is that!!

    But these phantom eyes say it all think, the kind of eyes that look right through us, never revealing any truths we can cling to.

    I really enjoyed this, and your smiling photo in your sidebar.

    • August 16, 2011 at 4:50 pm

      Jannie! Bingo! You pcked up on that line perfectly. Phamtom eyes, we have all seen then I think

  29. August 16, 2011 at 5:29 pm

    Love the pic and the essence it gives to your words. Very nice piece.

  30. August 16, 2011 at 11:05 pm

    Very nice work on form and sound….thank you for sharing I can feel the ocean..so well in this…bkm

    • August 17, 2011 at 6:48 am

      Thank you BMK for visiting and commenting. I was hoping to share the ocean with my words

  31. August 17, 2011 at 9:17 am

    Wow, look at all these comments. That means it is onefine poem! I totally loved it, the wistful yearning, the nostalgia, the memories. Especially love the title and the line that is the same. Beautiful!

    • August 17, 2011 at 9:21 am

      Sherry, it is alwaays a pleasure to see your comments. Thank you for visiting.

  32. August 17, 2011 at 10:48 am

    A great sonnet with tremendous visuals to go with it.
    I love the line ‘I hunger laughter shared on sunny days’ – provoked memories from my childhood, lying with friends in the fileds watching the summer skies.
    A great read. Thanks

    • August 17, 2011 at 11:13 am

      Thanks Mike for your comment. Wasn’t it fun to watch for shapes in cloulds. How simple life was then.

  33. ladynyo
    August 17, 2011 at 11:03 am

    A lovely sonnet, difficult form it is, but you did a good job of mixing human emotion with imagery.

    Works well.

    Lady Nyo

    • August 17, 2011 at 11:13 am

      Thank you for your visit and wonderful comment Lady Nyo.

  34. August 17, 2011 at 2:54 pm

    This poignant piece is evocative of wonderful times that the writer longs to rekindle. The lovely softness and not-quite-pleading bring a gentle dignity to something difficult to experience and to write about. You have done an awesome job here. Well done!

    • August 17, 2011 at 3:15 pm

      Elizabeth, your insightful comment is breathtaking. Thank you for elaborating on your thoughts.

  35. hobgoblin2011
    August 17, 2011 at 3:39 pm

    I enjoyed this. Really like the tone and the emotion in the words. Craving and longing is ever-present and you handled it beautifully. The image fits in perfectly as well. Look forward to reading more of your work. Thanks for sharing

    • August 17, 2011 at 4:05 pm

      Thank you for your time and comment. Isn’t looking at clouds for shapes fun? Have a great day!

  36. August 17, 2011 at 4:52 pm

    I long for truth behind your phantom eyes;
    release your secret world, allow me in.

    Excellent lines in a fine sonnet. Thank you.

    • August 17, 2011 at 5:09 pm

      Anna,
      Thank you for your kind comment. Glad you enjoyed the sonnet. Have a wonderful day!

  37. August 18, 2011 at 6:27 am

    reminds me of something I wrote recently about the night. I really like this line.

    I miss your music dancing on my skin….. :)

  38. August 18, 2011 at 2:49 pm

    Very nice imagery and heartfelt too…I love the personal symbolism in the title..

    • August 19, 2011 at 4:35 pm

      Unsungpoet, how kind of you to visit. Thanks for recognizing the title.

  39. August 19, 2011 at 2:31 pm

    I can’t believe (quite egotistical) that I haven’t already commented on this! And after this many glasses of wine I shouldn’t, since whatever I say isn’t believable… But I LOVE this. In so many ways… Both from a poetic form kind of love and a simply emotional kind if love… You are amazing! This is amazing! I’m just sorry I am so late in commenting! *big hugs*

    • August 19, 2011 at 4:34 pm

      How kind of you CC. You are welcomed here whenever you can. No worries. You left a beautiful comment, well worth the wait!

  40. August 20, 2011 at 9:19 am

    night is good time for when we are happy,otherwise it will eat us us acid…

    nicely written.

  41. August 21, 2011 at 11:58 am

    Very cool, I like the kick’d backness to it, and the thoughts, and it is powerful indeed. Thank you, much appreciated, WS

    • August 21, 2011 at 5:59 pm

      Thank you John. I was amazed by your wordsmithing, spent an hour reading.

  42. August 22, 2011 at 7:59 am

    Stunning image! Your words carry like the skies steed, trodding onward, pulling the reader into your world.

    Conflicting thoughts merge, lacking words to say,
    my willing heart drawn into your eclipse –
    has left me drained. A warm tear gently slips
    down a familiar path, wet lines portray.

    Beautiful imagery here in your words as well.

    • August 22, 2011 at 6:12 pm

      Reflections, Thank you for visiting and reading.

  43. August 22, 2011 at 8:55 am

    “A warm tear gently slips
    down a familiar path” on my face from this beautiful expression of your heart.

    Thank you for sharing this.

    • August 22, 2011 at 6:13 pm

      Truly my pleasure woth. Thanks for visiting.

  44. August 22, 2011 at 3:33 pm

    The last stanza did it for me, it was just beautiful and I could so relate :)
    Thanks for the visit :)

    • August 22, 2011 at 6:15 pm

      I think the feeling portrayed in this poem is universal at least at some point on your journey called life. Thanks you for the visit.

  45. August 22, 2011 at 6:02 pm

    Such poignant longing on display here. So wistful and heartbreaking.

    • August 22, 2011 at 6:16 pm

      Gene, Thank you for your visit. Loving the poetic expressions!

  46. August 25, 2011 at 9:52 am

    Wow, the images provoked and the sweet wine from your words are intoxicating! Love it!

    • August 25, 2011 at 10:01 am

      Sweet words whispered in my ear. Thank you Leonargo.

  47. August 26, 2011 at 12:51 pm

    Wonderful line: “I miss your music dancing on my skin”

    • August 26, 2011 at 1:18 pm

      Thanks, that was a fun line to write. Have a wonderful day, and thank you for all your comments on my poetry.

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