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Spare the Rod… Please?

This poem was a difficult write. Not only with the words chosen but my dark muse appeared. This is a dark poem of child abuse, but a subject that always needs attention.  I hope I did it justice on a few levels.
Submitted to The Sunday Whirl,
 
 
Torn curtains can hold twisted memories
of acts remembered, pain forgotten not.
The reprehensible atrocities
behind closed doors, leave rendered spots.
 
Sore red lines cast external bruising gild
on flesh so pure, its’ contrast scattered deep.
One blink can whirl wet eyes from sad tears filled,
before the young will climb on clouds to sleep.
 
Domestic stains remain as clocks tick time;
contort the scan of life’s new marvel age.
Bad memories will haunt this blind crime
thus, leaves a spirit blistering enraged.
 

 TheMsLvh © 2011

image source: Staale N

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  1. July 27, 2011 at 7:22 pm

    Very nice post today thanks. I really enjoyed it. See you around!

  2. July 27, 2011 at 7:52 pm

    A difficult subject to write about; I think you did it well. Good use of the wordle also.

  3. July 27, 2011 at 8:14 pm

    The emotions run clear through this one. I can tell it was hard to write and thank you for doing so anyway.

  4. July 27, 2011 at 8:25 pm

    I like the last lines of each stanza. They stand out, each summing up a point. Difficult topic especially when wrapped in a wordle.

    margo

  5. July 27, 2011 at 9:45 pm

    You have now shown you are not afraid to take on any topic. You have also shown that you can write with the depth and feeling needed to touch all those different layers of emotion.

  6. July 28, 2011 at 12:16 am

    Deeply touching effective and a topic beautifully expressed in the given word frame.The words this time are asking for a great effort.You have done it really well.

  7. July 28, 2011 at 1:07 am

    I think that with a full range such a subject is difficult to write about. You did it with constraints. I take my hat off – it is powerful, dark, disturbing. Everything such a poem should be,

  8. July 28, 2011 at 6:30 am

    You made the mental and physical abuse very clear. I hope in some way it was cathartic for you.

  9. July 29, 2011 at 7:54 am

    This is a strong piece. I was especially drawn to the excellent description/contrast between the terror when awake and the relief of sleep. Thank you for sharing.

  10. July 30, 2011 at 9:16 am

    This is a dark piece, but an important piece, as well. Thank you for giving the issue attention here. You took the word “gild” to an interesting place.

  11. July 30, 2011 at 5:12 pm

    An emotional piece on a sad reality… well done!

  12. August 1, 2011 at 4:13 pm

    The images in this poem illustrate a tragic reality. I especially like the last stanza, which reminds me of the permanent effects of abuse. Congratulations on Blog of the Week…well deserved!

    • August 1, 2011 at 5:54 pm

      I would not have even known about Blog of the Week unless you had posted this. Thank you for your visit and your time in reading some of my words.

  13. August 1, 2011 at 4:16 pm

    Your imagery is vivid and message direct. Not easily done with a wordle. Terrific effort.

  14. August 1, 2011 at 5:11 pm

    Bravely written!

  15. August 1, 2011 at 5:47 pm

    I can relate.

  16. August 6, 2011 at 9:10 am

    An emotional and painful subject expressed so well in 12 lines.

    • August 6, 2011 at 6:12 pm

      I just wanted to write and give it the justice the subject deserved. Happy you liked it

  17. August 6, 2011 at 8:13 pm

    And you have given it the justice it deserves. Well done.

    Pamela

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