Spare the Rod… Please?
This poem was a difficult write. Not only with the words chosen but my dark muse appeared. This is a dark poem of child abuse, but a subject that always needs attention. I hope I did it justice on a few levels.
Submitted to The Sunday Whirl,
Torn curtains can hold twisted memories
of acts remembered, pain forgotten not.
The reprehensible atrocities
behind closed doors, leave rendered spots.
Sore red lines cast external bruising gild
on flesh so pure, its’ contrast scattered deep.
One blink can whirl wet eyes from sad tears filled,
before the young will climb on clouds to sleep.
Domestic stains remain as clocks tick time;
contort the scan of life’s new marvel age.
Bad memories will haunt this blind crime
thus, leaves a spirit blistering enraged.
TheMsLvh © 2011
image source: Staale N
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Very nice post today thanks. I really enjoyed it. See you around!
A difficult subject to write about; I think you did it well. Good use of the wordle also.
The emotions run clear through this one. I can tell it was hard to write and thank you for doing so anyway.
I like the last lines of each stanza. They stand out, each summing up a point. Difficult topic especially when wrapped in a wordle.
margo
You have now shown you are not afraid to take on any topic. You have also shown that you can write with the depth and feeling needed to touch all those different layers of emotion.
Deeply touching effective and a topic beautifully expressed in the given word frame.The words this time are asking for a great effort.You have done it really well.
I think that with a full range such a subject is difficult to write about. You did it with constraints. I take my hat off – it is powerful, dark, disturbing. Everything such a poem should be,
You made the mental and physical abuse very clear. I hope in some way it was cathartic for you.
This is a strong piece. I was especially drawn to the excellent description/contrast between the terror when awake and the relief of sleep. Thank you for sharing.
This is a dark piece, but an important piece, as well. Thank you for giving the issue attention here. You took the word “gild” to an interesting place.
An emotional piece on a sad reality… well done!
The images in this poem illustrate a tragic reality. I especially like the last stanza, which reminds me of the permanent effects of abuse. Congratulations on Blog of the Week…well deserved!
I would not have even known about Blog of the Week unless you had posted this. Thank you for your visit and your time in reading some of my words.
Your imagery is vivid and message direct. Not easily done with a wordle. Terrific effort.
Bravely written!
I can relate.
An emotional and painful subject expressed so well in 12 lines.
I just wanted to write and give it the justice the subject deserved. Happy you liked it
And you have given it the justice it deserves. Well done.
Pamela
Ah! Thank you Pamela