Flash in Time
For in a moment you suspended time
with your soft verses, synchronized in rhyme.
My ears were longing for expressions new;
the hours shared together were too few.
Our eyes connected with a flash of light;
a flash you see as twilight turns to night.
Some say it’s green, but none the less, it’s bright
when eyes connect, the thrill, so real, so right.
Your five o’clock scent seared a memory,
that will burn forever in history.
Tongues dancing on the moonlight’s heated skin,
igniting passion’s aching need – within.
Was it a dream of my desired want?
Throughout the day those deep memories haunt,
for it was just a flash in time gone past –
but forever a memory to last.
-TheMsLvh © 2011 *edited 9/16/11
Submitted –http://dversepoets.com/2011/09/15/meeting-the-bar-critique-and-craft-approach-notes/ @ dVerse Poets Pub
California Ink In Motion by TheMsLvh is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-NonCommercial-NoDerivs 3.0 Unported License
Love the rhyme, love the subject, love the imagery… *longing sigh*
Thank you CC!
Lovely imagery here – well done
Thank you Jo!
“a memory that lasts” can be bittersweet……beautifully written!
So very true Sherry
perfect in rhyming and imagery, wow.
why don’t you share with us today.
Greetings:
If possible, you are invited to share your poetry with us tonight,
The linking is open now, come in any time.
Bless your talent.
Happy Monday.
xoxox
sensual! lovely
wow.
amazing and hot.
:)
Sizzling hot! LOL..thanks Jingle
Yes some times some thoughts and desires flash a wish that stays within…
Love your lines…
‘burned a memory in my lip that stayed
Tongues move smoothly as they danced a tango ‘
Your words … so beautiful…
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/07/whispers-memories-to-live-by.html
Delightfully sensual!
Beautifully written and expressed. It sizzles, like the memory of love should :)
I enjoyed the visuals in this well written piece
Deeeeelicious! Very sensual and real. Excellent writing!
Beautiful flow and rhyme, vivid sensual poem! I love the third stanza especially =)
yes, the third line was fun to write. Thank you for your comment. I love your writtings as well.
OOOH! I like that poem!! How romantic!! I think all women want that in their life! To have that moment suspended in time, and forever in your memories!! Good poem my friend! I wish that for you always!!!
Love the emotion and the powerful imagery here. Both create lasting memories and this piece conveys that fantastically. Great piece!
Thank you Tekia for taking the time to visit! Loved your comment.
I love that feeling :) poetry, poets, love, romance cool!!! :)
enjoy the potluck!!!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/08/14/smokescreen/
Very vivid and enjoyable!
Here’s my offering for Potluck 48: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/14/the-lake/
Very well done.
Thank you Michael
…and a wonderful memory indeed.
A lovely, sensuous write. Nice image too
Thanks for sharing.
I’m here:
Make Sweet Love To Me
amazing, superb piece.
Thank you for your visit and a wonderful review.
Happy Potluck!
your writing is remarkably inspiring, keep it up.
:)
Happy Wednesday.
Cheers, glad to see you share…
Significant parallels between our poem! Thanks for bringing me to this lovely read. Victoria
perfect and fitting entry.
;)
beautiful…
:)
This is so lovely
oh how beautiful it is! great write and glad to be of acquaintance. my entry if you have time.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2009/11/24/fluttering-in-an-envelope/
Thanks for visiting. Your butterfly poem was so lovely.
I very much enjoyed this poem – so very intimate and moving – your form is wonderful and houses your content beautifully – the metre of the piece ensures a smooth read – those flleting moments – if only they could last or we could experience them over – i guess we try to do this through art and you have managed an incredible job here
over all a magic experience – you have a clear and romantic poetic voice which conveys your stlye wonderfully – a real pleasure.
It was a real pleasure to read your comment Poppy. Yes. I would love to experience again some highlights in my life. Sure! I agree that art is an attempt to do that, not for only the artist but also the viewer. Have a great day!
Was it a dream of my desired wants?
Throughout the day that deep memory haunts,
for it was just a flash in time gone past –
but forever a memory to last.
this is great ending and really sends the poem in the right direction – and expands its meaning and interest – you are clearly a passionate writer – and can deliver poetry of this kind with clarity and emotion and its not over sentimental or icky – just fine writing.
your skill as a poet is always noted evry time i visit – your technical skill/gifts are always tight and present your content in a great light.
Aaron. You always leave such wonderful comments. Thank you for your compliment about my writing. Thanks Aaron.
dang sounds like a memory i would cling to…smiles. 3rd stanza there are tense issue in the tongues move line….not sure you need the just in the opening line…just a few little clips…will let your crit-ers do the most…i think it is well constructed though….
Brian. thank you for your comments. I looked and agreed with you, so I edited. This is why I love Thrus. Night at dVerse. Thank you!
How are you today?
Happy end of November!
Appreciated your support to our poetry picnic,
Hope to see you share today,
A random poem or old poem will do the wonders too.
Your talent rocks.
Hope to see you in.
xoxox