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Flash in Time

 
For in a moment you suspended time
with your soft verses, synchronized in rhyme.
My ears were longing for expressions new;
the hours shared together were too few.
 
Our eyes connected with a flash of light;
a flash you see as twilight turns to night.
Some say it’s green, but none the less, it’s bright
when eyes connect, the thrill, so real, so right.
 
Your five o’clock scent seared a memory,
that will burn forever in history.
Tongues dancing on the moonlight’s heated skin,
 igniting passion’s aching need – within.
 
Was it a dream of my desired want?
Throughout the day those deep memories haunt,
for it was just a flash in time gone past –
but forever a memory to last.
 
-TheMsLvh     © 2011 *edited 9/16/11

 
  1. July 17, 2011 at 12:09 pm

    Love the rhyme, love the subject, love the imagery… *longing sigh*

  2. July 17, 2011 at 3:10 pm

    Lovely imagery here – well done

  3. July 17, 2011 at 5:45 pm

    “a memory that lasts” can be bittersweet……beautifully written!

  4. July 17, 2011 at 6:26 pm

    perfect in rhyming and imagery, wow.

    why don’t you share with us today.

    Greetings:

    If possible, you are invited to share your poetry with us tonight,
    The linking is open now, come in any time.
    Bless your talent.
    Happy Monday.
    xoxox

  5. July 17, 2011 at 7:07 pm

    sensual! lovely

  6. July 17, 2011 at 7:32 pm

    wow.
    amazing and hot.

    :)

    • July 17, 2011 at 7:51 pm

      Sizzling hot! LOL..thanks Jingle

  7. July 18, 2011 at 12:34 am

    Yes some times some thoughts and desires flash a wish that stays within…
    Love your lines…
    ‘burned a memory in my lip that stayed
    Tongues move smoothly as they danced a tango ‘
    Your words … so beautiful…

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/07/whispers-memories-to-live-by.html

  8. July 18, 2011 at 4:31 am

    Delightfully sensual!

  9. July 18, 2011 at 5:16 am

    Beautifully written and expressed. It sizzles, like the memory of love should :)

  10. July 18, 2011 at 6:49 am

    I enjoyed the visuals in this well written piece

  11. July 18, 2011 at 12:08 pm

    Deeeeelicious! Very sensual and real. Excellent writing!

  12. July 19, 2011 at 6:33 am

    Beautiful flow and rhyme, vivid sensual poem! I love the third stanza especially =)

    • July 19, 2011 at 6:39 am

      yes, the third line was fun to write. Thank you for your comment. I love your writtings as well.

  13. Leona
    July 20, 2011 at 5:37 am

    OOOH! I like that poem!! How romantic!! I think all women want that in their life! To have that moment suspended in time, and forever in your memories!! Good poem my friend! I wish that for you always!!! 

  14. tekia
    July 20, 2011 at 8:27 am

    Love the emotion and the powerful imagery here. Both create lasting memories and this piece conveys that fantastically. Great piece!

    • July 20, 2011 at 8:38 am

      Thank you Tekia for taking the time to visit! Loved your comment.

  15. August 14, 2011 at 7:07 pm

    I love that feeling :) poetry, poets, love, romance cool!!! :)
    enjoy the potluck!!!

    http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/08/14/smokescreen/

  16. August 14, 2011 at 7:12 pm

    Very vivid and enjoyable!

    Here’s my offering for Potluck 48: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/14/the-lake/

  17. August 14, 2011 at 7:17 pm

    Very well done.

  18. August 14, 2011 at 8:38 pm

    …and a wonderful memory indeed.

    A lovely, sensuous write. Nice image too

    Thanks for sharing.

    I’m here:
    Make Sweet Love To Me

  19. August 15, 2011 at 5:16 pm

    amazing, superb piece.

    • August 15, 2011 at 5:25 pm

      Thank you for your visit and a wonderful review.

  20. August 17, 2011 at 10:22 am

    Happy Potluck!

    your writing is remarkably inspiring, keep it up.

    :)

  21. August 17, 2011 at 10:23 am

    Happy Wednesday.

    Cheers, glad to see you share…

  22. August 24, 2011 at 1:25 pm

    Significant parallels between our poem! Thanks for bringing me to this lovely read. Victoria

  23. August 29, 2011 at 7:46 pm

    perfect and fitting entry.

    ;)

  24. August 30, 2011 at 8:56 am

    beautiful…

    :)

  25. August 30, 2011 at 9:35 am

    This is so lovely

  26. August 31, 2011 at 6:52 am

    oh how beautiful it is! great write and glad to be of acquaintance. my entry if you have time.. http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2009/11/24/fluttering-in-an-envelope/

  27. poppyclock
    September 15, 2011 at 3:57 pm

    I very much enjoyed this poem – so very intimate and moving – your form is wonderful and houses your content beautifully – the metre of the piece ensures a smooth read – those flleting moments – if only they could last or we could experience them over – i guess we try to do this through art and you have managed an incredible job here

    over all a magic experience – you have a clear and romantic poetic voice which conveys your stlye wonderfully – a real pleasure.

    • September 16, 2011 at 6:04 am

      It was a real pleasure to read your comment Poppy. Yes. I would love to experience again some highlights in my life. Sure! I agree that art is an attempt to do that, not for only the artist but also the viewer. Have a great day!

  28. September 15, 2011 at 4:15 pm

    Was it a dream of my desired wants?

    Throughout the day that deep memory haunts,

    for it was just a flash in time gone past –

    but forever a memory to last.

    this is great ending and really sends the poem in the right direction – and expands its meaning and interest – you are clearly a passionate writer – and can deliver poetry of this kind with clarity and emotion and its not over sentimental or icky – just fine writing.

    your skill as a poet is always noted evry time i visit – your technical skill/gifts are always tight and present your content in a great light.

    • September 16, 2011 at 6:01 am

      Aaron. You always leave such wonderful comments. Thank you for your compliment about my writing. Thanks Aaron.

  29. September 15, 2011 at 8:53 pm

    dang sounds like a memory i would cling to…smiles. 3rd stanza there are tense issue in the tongues move line….not sure you need the just in the opening line…just a few little clips…will let your crit-ers do the most…i think it is well constructed though….

    • September 16, 2011 at 5:59 am

      Brian. thank you for your comments. I looked and agreed with you, so I edited. This is why I love Thrus. Night at dVerse. Thank you!

  30. November 29, 2011 at 8:39 am

    How are you today?

    Happy end of November!

    Appreciated your support to our poetry picnic,

    Hope to see you share today,

    A random poem or old poem will do the wonders too.

    Your talent rocks.

    Hope to see you in.

    xoxox

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